Summary: A strange mixture of horror and science fiction.
Thoughts: Well, that was a vague description. Let’s see if I can shed a little more light on the situation. The main character, Kep, is infected with… something. Not sure what. It just sort of happened one day at work, somewhat vaguely, and manifested as a pulsing headache that turned children around him into viscious psychotic little killers. Quite a creepy concept, actually.
This story suffered for its shortness, though. At less than 3000 words, it felt rushed, underdone, and sometimes bordering on nonsensical because nothing had time to be explained, just hinted at. A short story is all fine and dandy, but when the plot suffers for the shortness, it’s not a bad thing to add on another thousand words or so to make it better.
I’d like to see this one redone, expanded, developped further and then reposted. I can see a lot of potential here, and my curiosity was definitely aroused, and I wouldn’t want to see such a compelling idea go to waste.